There’s an piece in this week’s NYer about creative writing programs. In true NYer style, it’s good (and incredibly long), but this sentence came off with a clonk, especially in an article about learning to write well:
As McGurl points out, the horses that the Plains Indians rode when they hunted, so picturesquely, the buffalo were European imports.
I think every journalism professor in the country just had a stroke. How would you fix this sentence? Discuss!
Caroline
/ June 4, 2009This is terrible. Plus, Shawn Gillen does not need more health troubles.
“McGurl explains that the allegedly untainted Plains Indians hunted buffalo atop horses imported from Europe.”